Some of us wait silently to be loved, wait expectantly for our needs to be met. Others of us demand to be loved with stomping feet and a sharp tongue. The fortunate among us have learned to express their needs in ways that the listener understands, respects, and responds. We are all different in how we approach life and love, yet we all want and deserve love. My hope is that, rather than waiting for love or demanding love, we will learn to seek love in healthy, positive ways. Beyond this, my prayer is that we will first offer love and kindness to others, thus inviting love and kindness to come back to us.
This poem personalizes one seemingly ill-fated approach to finding love. What do you think the poem’s speaker could have done differently? Should the speaker have done anything differently? Was the speaker’s approach unreasonable? Consider posting your answer in the comment section below.
I WAITED FOR YOU
I waited for you:
Waited for you to come to me.
But you did not.
I waited for you
Like the crimson clouds after the tired sun drops behind the mountains.
When you came to me at last,
I had faded and gone.
I waited for you:
Waited for you to touch me.
But you did not.
I waited for you
Like a dry, dusty leaf under a charcoal sky when the soothing rain won’t fall.
When you reached for me at last,
I had withered and gone.
I waited for you:
Waited for you to smile at me.
But you did not.
I waited for you
Like a famished infant yearning to suck from her mother’s ripe, fragrant breast.
When you smiled at me at last,
I had drifted and gone.
What comes to my mind is : Instead of waiting for the one to come to me ..I should have come to her and been the one to touch and to smile , or at least show some kind of encouragement .
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Thank you Harv. A valid observation. One who only waits often never receives. Those who seek are those who find. Those who ask are those who receive.
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It’s a beautiful poem full of yearning and anticipation. But the speaker, being so fully encompassed in that anticipation perhaps should have made the first step rather than waiting for what must seem like an eternity for the reader to appear.
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Thanks Rocky. A great point. I agree entirely.
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This was like reading my own experience from years ago. The lesson that I learned is that when it comes to love, you cannot wait for it to fall in your lap; you must reach out for it and try to win it.
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Thanks for reading and commenting. I agree with your excellent point. We must reach out despite the risk of rejection or hurt or disappointment.
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This poem hit home for me as I felt like I was the one who waited….
I waited for him and now that all ties are severed, he is looking for me and I have withered and gone.
You write beautifully and from your heart! Keep up the good work!!
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Thank you Becky. I am glad you could relate to the poem, and am gratified that you have taken a few moments to read some of my writing. Best wishes to you.
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Well done! I connected. Best I’ve had in awhile, this needs to be in a book.
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Maybe someday.
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Thank you for the encouragement. I have found a place for this poem in my book, to be published early next month.
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